MrX Freewrite5

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MrX Freewrite5

Post  MrX on Tue Nov 16, 2010 1:00 pm

Hate
Arrogance
Cockiness

Love
Family
Robotics
The Legend of Zelda
Football

The Best
Touchdown!
Fourth of the game, not even halftime.
Why am I so darn good?
Because I'm James Freakin Dean that's why.
Bow down fools, I call.
Bow to the King of Kings!

28-zip.
The one game my family comes to,
and we are being massacred by arrogant punks.
How is this fair?
He's taunting us now.
Mom's still smiling, she doesn't even know what's going on.
She knows I'm sad and is trying to cheer me up...
I can do this.

35-28.
What the heck?
We were crushing them!
How did this happen?
I know how,
You were too full of yourself...

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Re: MrX Freewrite5

Post  MaryShelley on Thu Dec 16, 2010 3:48 pm

Keep working on this one! I'm not sure the speaker would ever believe or admit that his loss is a result of cockiness. The first stanza is great!

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